European powers had major differences in terms of types of colonial settlement such as English Southern Plantation colonies, French fur trade posts, Spanish encomienda colonies, and pious New England.
Needs counterargument. Try starting with something like "Although," or "While is may be argued that..." Your three categories need to be WAYS they colonies differed and you will evaluate all of the colonies in EACH category.
Though it was to be assumed that the European patterns of colonization would be similar due to the close proximity of locations and relations of the European countries in the motherland, the actual European colonial models varied greatly in terms of the Spanish harsh treatment of natives with their various encomienda and repartimiento systems, the friendly trade relations amongst the French and natives with the trade of beaver fur, and the need for an economic and social foothold in the Americas for the British with the start of Jamestown.
Rephrase to active voice (was to be assumed is passive and awkward). The main points need to be WAYS the countries differed, not one nation per point.
Europeans used a variety of methods in order to gain wealth from North America, be it the English way of settling down into permanent agricultural towns, the Spanish way of quickly conquering vast swaths of land in order to gain raw materials and rare metals, or the French method of peacefully bartering with the natives and setting up the fur trade, these groups used a variety of unique tactics in order to achieve their goals.
Missing a counterargument. Try starting with something like "Although," or "While is may be argued that..." Your three categories need to be WAYS they colonies differed and you will evaluate all of the colonies in EACH category.
Although there were many similarities in the ways Europeans colonized North America, the colonization of North America, during the time 1607 to 1754, by the Europeans differed greatly from power to power in their economic goals, cultural assumptions, and their ways of religious conversion.
Categories are appropriate, but need rephrasing to agree grammatically. Watch the repetition of colonized North America. Name a specific similarity as your counterpoint.
Though many major European powers exhibited similarities in their methods for colonization, there were noticeable differences regarding their treatment of native inhabitants, their religious beliefs and motivation, and types of trade they sought.
Name a specific method in which they were similar for the counterargument. Grammar - methods OF not FOR.
Although there were similarities in the way European powers colonized North America, the different European countries developed different patterns of colonization in reasons for colonization, relations with the natives, and extent and methods of expansion and colonization.
Point one, reasons, is not a way they colonized. Replace this category or rephrase to focus on the effects of those reasons. Point three is the entire question again, not a smaller category. Pick a specific way they were similar for the counterargument.
There were many similarities when it came to the ways of how Europeans developed patterns of colonization but some ways differed when it came to matters of economy, treatment of the native people and religious beliefs.
Name a specific similarity for your counterpoint. "...ways of how E. developed..." is awkward phrasing. How much did they differ? was is of greater significance than the similarities? Answering these questions is how you set up argument. As it is, the thesis is a recitation of facts... make it an argument.Instead of just what they believed, talk about effects of religion or religious institutions.
Despite the claims that European colonies developed in similar structures, according to the theory that ideas spread eastward, the commercially centralized French, the glory seeking Spanish, and the English religious persecution escapees supply evidence that European colonies in the New World had contrasting developmental patterns.
Refer to the fact that claims could be made, not that they have been made...you don't know if they have unless you are citing a specific person's argument. Pick a specific similarity for your counterpoint. Your main points need to be ways they settled and you need to talk about each nation in each point.
While there were many similarities in the patterns of colonization developed by the European powers, they differed in terms of their economies, religious beliefs, and relations with the natives.
Pick a specific similarity like you have for your main points. Otherwise good!
Although different European powers may have colonized in the Americas in some ways, during the period of 1607 to 1754, different European powers had different patterns of colonization for different reasons such as economic growth or for territory control in order to gain more power.
Re-read your first phrase, it is missing a specific expression of similarity or dissimilarity. Main points need to be WAYS they settled, not reasons.
Despite the fact that there where similarities in the methods used by Europeans explorers in developing colonies in the New World, they differ in terms of purpose. Some settlements had the purpose to find economic wealth, religious freedom, to become famous, or to even spread Christianity.
cite a specific similarity for our counterpoint.Use past tense throughout. Your three main points need to be WAYS they settled, not reasons.
Although the European powers' desires to colonize in North America had similar focal points, there were differences in the European views of interracial relationships between natives and colonists, religious beliefs, and sources of economic profit.
Not sure what you mean by "similar focal points." Point 2 needs to be a result, so religious institutions or something like that.
Although some parallels between the migration patterns of European powers were evident, empires such as the English, Spanish, and French developed a variety of colonization behaviors in America due in part to differing cultures, religious pursuits, and imperial motivation.
Rephrase the main points to be OUTCOMES or WAYS instead of causes. Choose a specific similarity for your counterpoint.
Although the europeans' methods of colonization in the new world were similar
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The colonization of North America by European countries differentiated greatly through economic and religious goals as well as desires for territory and power.
Grammar - say "differed" or "were differentiated." Make your main points OUTCOMES or WAYS they colonized, not reasons. Add a counterpoint.
although the europeans' methods of colonization in the new world were similar, their purpose differed as some countries focused on religious reasons, some on economic profits and others for personal benefits
Ahhh. Here's the rest! Pick a specific similarity for the counterpoint. Make sure you are discussing ALL countries you discuss in EVERY point. Purposes are not OUTCOMES or WAYS they settled, so rework your main points.
Even though there were similarities in the ways of European colonization of North America, European super powers differed in their ways of colonization because their different goals in their quest for territories in America as some nations came to the New World primarily for economic reasons, others came with the actual hope of colonizing the land.
Doesn't ask why they differed (goals, reasons, etc.) but HOW they differed (OUTCOMES or WAYS they colonized). Pick a specific similarity for the counterpoint.
There was major variety in how the European power colonized the Americas, but their underlying reasoning and methods for colonization were more similar than different.
Questions asks that how part which you have as a counterpoint, not the reasons why which you currently have as your main points of argument. Refocus your analysis on WAYS they settled or OUTCOMES of settlement.
Although the Europeans were similar in terms of their search for gaining power, the North American colonists differed in their means of treating the Native Americans, method for religious conversion, and their ultimate economic goals.
Good! Make that specific similarity in the counterpoint a WAY like your other main points.
The development of different patterns of colonization in North America solely relied on the fulfillment of spreading religious beliefs, meeting societal needs, and attaining economic intentions.
AVOID LIKE THE PLAGUE phrases or terms of absolute value, like "solely." Hedge with words like "primarily," or "significantly." Your main points are goals and instead need to be WAYS they settled or OUTCOMES of settlement. Missing counterpoint.
Although many European powers such as the English, French, Dutch, and Spanish had settlements in the New World, they each had their own reasons to colonize such as trades with natives, raw materials, plantations, social reforms, religious reforms, economic reforms, conversion to Christianity, and other similar goals.
The question asked HOW, not WHY. You also need to limit the thesis to three main points! Your counterpoint also needs to be a HOW, not just that they all colonized.
European countries developed similar ways of colonization. Some of the differences were the way the powers treated natives, beliefs, and reasons for settling.
ONE SENTENCE! All main points need to be WAYS they settled or OUTCOMES of settlement, not reasons. Your counterpoint also needs to be a WAY, but one that they had in common.
European powers developed different patterns of colonization through their different types of economies, their differing reasons for colonization, and the relationships they established with neighboring Native American tribes.
All main points need to be WAYS they colonized or OUTCOMES of colonization, not reasons. Also missing a counterpoint.
While it can be supposed that colonization is the same despite country and purpose, there are clear economic, religious, and social differences between the different practices of American colonization utilized by the countries of Europe.
Always PAST tense. Great categories of analysis, but the counterpoint also should be a WAY or OUTCOME like the other main points.
Although the factor of distance caused limitations on European power in America, European powers developed different patterns of colonization in North America that involved economic benefits, adverse relations with the natives, and the desire to spread certain religious beliefs.
Last main point needs to be the outcomes of that desire, like religious institutions on role of religion in politics and society.
Although European powers raced to colonize as much land as possible from 1607 to 1754, different countries had different motives for colonization; some groups colonized for economic benefits while other settlers colonized to escape religious persecution.
All main points need to be WAYS they colonized or OUTCOMES of colonization, not reasons.Your counterpoint likewise should be a way or outcomes, not just that they colonized.
Similarities are present when it comes to looking at the developmental patters regarding Europeans colonization although some differences were shown through religious beliefs, treatment of natives and the economy.
Although many similarities are present in regards to the developmental patterns of European colonization, the British French and Spanish had varying religious beliefs, treatment of natives, and the economic strategies and motivations.
It looks like you already revised based on conversations in class today! Good! Much improved, but point one needs to address what those religious beliefs did in colonization, not just that they had them. Something like "religious institutions" or "role of religion in politics and society."
Also... always past tense :)
While the lures of the "New World" attracted many European powers, the methods by which they gained control varied from the SPanish way of direct native enslavvement to French favor currying.
Each main point should compare and contrast ALL of the nations you include in your discussion, so Native relations would be one point. Also your counterpoint should be more than just that they wanted to colonize.
European powers exhibited similar strategies in colonization, but what varied between each power was their religious and economic motives, and their relationships with the natives.
All main points need to be WAYS they colonized or OUTCOMES of colonization, not reasons or motives. Also, pick a specific way they were similar for the counterpoint.
Although European philosophy towards the indigenous inhabitants were fundamentally social darwinistic ,methods of colonization varied immensely due to differences in religious background, desired ambitions ,method and types of trade.
All main points need to be WAYS they colonized or OUTCOMES of colonization, not reasons. This is true for the counterpoint as well.
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