Thesis Statement Board - 3rd Period - Hutchison

9/3/2021

Post your thesis statement rough draft here before 12:00am tonight. I will post my comments by Wednesday so that you can make the appropriate adjustments.

You are NOT required to read and comment on other's thesis statements at this point.

PROMPT: To what extent and in what ways did European powers develop different patterns of colonization in North America during the period from 1607 to 1754?

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80 Comments

Rachel Ssengonzi

9/3/2021 05:53:33 pm

European powers developed different patterns of colonization as they seeked religious freedom, expansion of their empires, and new opportunities to become wealthy. However there are several other motivations that contributed to the colonization of the Americas.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:55:02 pm

You are focusing on motivations: why they colonized; but the question asks HOW they colonized.

rachel ssengonzi

9/9/2021 08:59:04 pm

During the period of 1607 to 1754 European powers were in search for wealth and religious freedom. All these groups used systems like African enslavement and exploitation to further their expansion. Yet each group also had different approaches in administrative systems, relationships with Natives, and economic growth.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:54:14 pm

Drop the first sentence about what they wanted to achieve then combine the other two sentences into one and you'll be good!

Anika Sompuram

9/3/2021 07:03:22 pm

Although, it seems as if all European powers colonized with the same main intentions, strongly, they all developed different patterns of colonization in North America from 1607 to 1754 dependent on if they were seeking to spread religion, gain wealth, control trade, expand their influence, or for a mixture of reasons.

Anika Sompuram

9/8/2021 08:15:57 pm

Although, some European colonies had different labor systems when colonizing North America, the English and French both used African slaves as labor for colonizing, by exploiting Africans they were able to expand power and influence through the trade of cash crops and increase in profits.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:56:16 pm

Everything after "...labor for colonizing" needs to be dropped and replaced with a second (and possibly third) similarity in the way they colonized.

Anika Sompuram

9/10/2021 11:42:56 am

Although, European colonies had some similar ways of colonizing North America, such as the use of Africans as their labor systems, there were also major differences in their relations with the Indigenous Americans and government establishments.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:54:30 pm

Good.

Gavin Hansen

9/3/2021 07:22:31 pm

To gain wealth through precious metals, land, and new goods European powers developed patterns of colonization.Other secondary patterns of colonization that contributed to the colonization of the Americas but the primary patterns of colonization were conquering land to be colonized or trading with the Natives.

Gavin Hansen

9/9/2021 02:11:46 pm

Secondary patterns of colonization that contributed to the colonization of the Americas were religion and glory. Primary patterns of colonization were to gain wealth through precious metals, land, and new goods by conquering land to be colonized or trading with the Natives.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:57:36 pm

Drop anything about reasons for colonization, the question doesn't ask about that. Thesis statements need to be one sentence. you need to be stating whether they were more similar or more different in the WAYS they colonized.

Gavin Hansen

9/10/2021 11:35:54 am

Second Revision: A few European powers used similar patterns of colonization by focusing on spreading Christianity to natives, however most European powers had very different patterns of colonization by conquering land and how they interacted with natives.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:55:31 pm

You probably need to find a different main point, perhaps economic systems or something, since you are already discussing Indigenous relations in your counterpoint.

Gavin Hansen

9/14/2021 10:04:38 am

A few European powers used similar patterns of colonization based on how they interacted with Native Americans, however most European powers had very different patterns of colonization through the creation of racial or wealth systems which impacted how people are viewed in society.

Gavin Hansen

9/14/2021 02:12:22 pm

4th Revision: A few European powers used similar patterns of colonization by creating governments in the Americas similar to theirs at home, however most European powers had very different patterns of colonization based on how they interacted with Native Americans and used different labor systems.

Aakanksha Kulkarni

9/3/2021 07:27:33 pm

While European colonies in North America did develop distinct governments such as proprietaries, most colonies from 1607 to 1754 developed on similar bases of plantation, settler, or exploitation colonization; these were embedded with similar practices of racial labor systems, new economic systems, and extensive Native American conflict which further influenced the society at large.

Aakanksha Kulkarni

9/8/2021 05:24:38 pm

While European colonies in North America did use certain similar practices in their colonization efforts, such as racial systems of labor, most colonies from 1607 to 1754 developed on different bases of plantation, settler, or exploitation colonization; these further constituted differing levels of Native American conflict - all of which further influenced colonization and development at large.

Aakanksha Kulkarni

9/9/2021 08:51:28 pm

While European colonies in North America did use similar practices in their colonization efforts, such as consolidated colonial government/authority, most colonies from 1607 to 1754 developed on different bases of economic systems & activities, had varying relationships with Native Americans, and established different social/racial labor systems - all of which further influenced colonization and development at large.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:01:31 pm

The board won't let me reply to your most recent revision so I'm posting it here:

Drop everything after the "-" near the end of the sentence. Rephrase to remove "/" anywhere you have them, they don't belong in formal writing. Otherwise, good!

Aakanksha

9/10/2021 11:29:17 am

Revised:
While European colonies in North America did use similar practices in their colonization efforts, such as consolidated colonial authority, most colonies from 1607 to 1754 developed on different bases of economic systems and activities, had varying relationships with Native Americans, and established different social and racial labor systems.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:55:49 pm

Good!

Stella

9/3/2021 09:21:00 pm

While there were some similarities in colonization such as the idea of spreading Christianity to natives, the differences of European colonization in North America were more prominent, for instance, different patterns of colonization, different economic goals and the use of forced labor versus indentured servants.

Stella

9/8/2021 06:02:50 pm

REVISED: Although there were some similarities between the European powers such as all having a central power unit in their government, history shows that there were more differences between English, Spanish and French nations including different economic systems/activities, different approaches to colonizing and getting land, and how each nation treated the natives/their relationship with the natives of the land.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:03:44 pm

Your second main point would be better as simply "acquiring land." Drop any slashes and simply the phrasing of those portions. Otherwise good!

Stella

9/10/2021 11:30:20 am

REVISED PT2
Although there were some similarities between the European powers such as all having a central power unit in their government, history shows that there were more differences between English, Spanish and French nations including different economic systems and activities, different approaches to acquiring land, and how each nation treated the natives as well as their relationships with the natives.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:56:54 pm

Good, but you might think about a less awkward way of saying your counterpoint. Just "governmental systems" would suffice.

Stella

9/13/2021 06:33:36 pm

REVISED PT3
Although there were some similarities between the European powers, such as all having governmental systems, history shows that there were more differences between English, Spanish and French nations including different economic systems and activities, different approaches to acquiring land, and how each nation treated the natives as well as their relationships with the natives.

Hutch$

9/14/2021 08:53:24 am

Thumbs up

Andrew Horng

9/3/2021 09:26:20 pm

Although most European colonies in North America had developed and practiced different ways of colonization, most of them had develop different patterns of colonization that would help them spread religion, conquer land, gain wealth, and overall just expand their influence/power.

Andrew Horng

9/9/2021 06:02:08 pm

Although most European colonies did develop differently such as in the way they governed, ran economy, and the different cultures/ideas they believed in, most of the colonies were similar in how they supported racial slavery, along with how they had very poor relations with the Native Americans.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:04:55 pm

Choose ONE of the specific counterpoint examples and drop the rest, then add a phrase indicating that the difference were more historically significant.

Andrew Horng

9/10/2021 03:26:28 pm

Although most European colonies did develop differently, most historically significant being in the way they governed, most of the colonies were similar in how they supported racial slavery, along with how they had very poor relations with the Native Americans.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:57:14 pm

Good job.

Elijah Siry

9/3/2021 09:37:57 pm

Even though Europeans introduced dissimilar ways of governance to their overseas holdings, the grand majority of colonies from 1607-1754 relied on slave based export economies, mild laissez faire styled governments, or extraction based economies bent on the acquisition of natural resources; All of which were formed around the idea of gaining more land, spreading their religion, gaining resources as well as the massive amounts of riches to be found in the Americas.

Elijah

9/9/2021 07:38:51 pm

Even though Europeans were collectively seen as searching for gold and exploiters of the continent, they all had their own ways of setting up their colonial governments; basing them around slavery, laissez faire settler governments, or extraction based economies, which were all used for gaining more land, getting converts, and gaining the massive amounts of natural and monetary wealth to be found in America.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:07:22 pm

Drop anything about reasons or goals (the entire last two lines of the thesis, for example). Rephrase so that you remove the first "colonial governments" and just say "colonies." Counterpoint is currently a "why" they colonized, so it needs to become a "how" they colonized like your main points.

Elijah

9/10/2021 03:42:57 pm

Even though Europeans introduced not so similar ways of running their colonies, the Spaniards, British, and the French all colonized via their exploitative and settler based colonial policies which dominated their colonies.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:58:17 pm

You need to identify a specific different in your counterpoint and you need to also identify at least two specific similarities as main points at the end of the sentence.

Clare Smith

9/3/2021 09:53:44 pm

Although the motivations for colonization and migration were largely the same - religion, wealth, and expansion; the methodologies different European powers used to establish colonies varied based upon the cultural, political, and moral values of the mother country.

Clare Smith

9/9/2021 08:45:45 pm

While some historians argue the colonial government systems used by the European powers were the most important factor in patterns of colonization, of greater significance was the use of extractive and exploitative colonization by the French, Dutch, and English to profit off the land and natural resources by using slave labor or trading with the indigenous population.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:09:07 pm

Rephrase to drop the "use of extractive..." portion any just list the ways as your main points (extractive economies, enslaved labor systems, indigenous trade relations).

Clare Smith

9/10/2021 11:33:41 am

While some historians argue the colonial government systems used by the European powers were the most important factor in patterns of colonization, of greater significance was the French, Dutch, and English extractive and exploitative colonial economies, enslaved labor systems, and indigenous trade relations.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:59:43 pm

Make sure your phrasing includes "similarity" and "difference" since comparison was the key skill in the question.

Clare Smith

9/13/2021 07:56:35 pm

While some historians argue the different colonial government systems used by the European powers were the most important factor in patterns of colonization, of greater significance was the similar extractive and exploitative colonial economies, enslaved labor systems, and indigenous trade relations utilized by the French, Dutch, and English.

Hutch$

9/14/2021 08:53:48 am

Good :)

Mila

9/3/2021 10:41:15 pm

While the majority of European colonization patterns did take one of three forms which were planter, extractive/exploitation, and settler settlements; each settlement type looked and ran differently from one European empire to the other.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:17:56 pm

You need to define a specific similarity as your counterpoint and you need to identify 2-3 specific differences as your main points. You also need a phrase that expresses the differences were more historically significant or important and the similarity.

MIla

9/10/2021 11:02:44 am

While the majority of European colonization patterns did take one of three forms which were planter, extractive/exploitation, and settler settlements; the laws and beliefs of a European empire were more important as an influencing factor in the development of colonization patterns in North America.

Mila

9/10/2021 11:27:08 am

Most recent revision: While the majority of European colonization patterns did take one of three forms which were planter, extractive/exploitation, and settler settlements; the laws and beliefs of a European empire were more important as an influencing factor in the development of colonization patterns in North America.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:00:44 pm

You need at least two main points, "laws and beliefs" is really only one point - legal systems.

Mila

9/14/2021 11:53:52 am

Most recent thesis revision: While the majority of European colonization patterns did take one of three forms which were planter, extractive/exploitation, and settler settlements; the legal systems and beliefs of a European empire were more important as an influencing factor in the development of colonization patterns in North America.

Claire de Larminat

9/4/2021 03:34:21 pm

Whilst Europeans are often grouped together during colonization due to their shared interests in religion, glory, and wealth, they all had various ways of expanding their empire, whether it was a settler colony, an extractive colony, or a planter colony: each of these colonies were different and varied based on the colonist's beliefs and interaction with native americans.

Claire

9/8/2021 12:22:45 pm

Whilst Europeans are often grouped together during colonization due to their shared interests in religion, glory, and wealth, they all had various ways of expanding their empire due to their being different colony types: planter colony, settler colony, or an extractive colony, each of these colonies were different and varied based on the colonist's beliefs and interaction with native americans.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:21:00 pm

Counterpoint needs to be a specific way they colonized, not a why they colonized. You also need to identify specific difference in the ways they colonized as your main points, not the colonial types.

Claire de Larminat

9/12/2021 01:22:30 pm

Whilst Europeans are often grouped together during colonization due to the fact that they all incorporated religion in their new governmental systems, the French, the English, and the Spanish were actually drastically different in their ways of expanding their empire during 1607-1754 because of their differed interactions with native americans, their various labor structures, and their different colony types: extractive, planter, or settler colony.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:01:18 pm

Good :)

Grayson Kaufman

9/4/2021 05:52:37 pm

During the period from 1607-1754, Eurpoeans continued to colonize in the present day United States with hopes of attaining great wealth and pride, while also attempting to grow their empires across the Atlantic. Each European colony had a unique set of goals, that differed from place to place, mainly depending on where the settlers traveled from.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:24:31 pm

Needs to be a single sentence. The counterpoint needs to be a WAY they colonized, not the why's. Likewise, your assertion and main points need to be specific ways they colonized, not goals or who colonized.

Grayson Kaufman

9/12/2021 08:23:42 pm

During the period from 1607-1754, Eurpoeans continued to colonize in the present day United States with hopes of attaining great wealth and pride, while also attempting to grow their empires across the Atlantic by using systems such as slavery, indentured servitude, and trade.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:02:41 pm

Counterpoint needs adjusted to be something they did to colonize, not what they wanted to achieve by colonizing.

Sriharsha Jaladhi

9/6/2021 10:16:08 am

While European colonies all practiced different ways of colonization and focus on different things, many of the colonies colonized in patterns and ways that would either help them strategically, economically, politically, or religiously.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:26:02 pm

You don't identify any specific ways they colonized. Drop anything about how the colonization affected the European nations. The question wants you to say whether they were more similar or more different in the WAYS they colonized.

Sriharsha Jaladhi

9/12/2021 05:04:38 pm

Revision: While European colonies practiced similar things in their colonies such as the colonies being controlled by their respective governments in Europe, the ways that most colonies were developed differed in terms of having different labor systems, varying interactions with indigenous people, and used different economic activities.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:03:12 pm

Good to go.

Akshara Kolipaka

9/7/2021 10:14:49 am

Although most European settlements were established with the purpose of Gold, Glory and God ,they developed different methods of colonization in North America during 1607 to 1754 based upon factors such as interactions with indigenous people, systems of labour, economic stability and religious nature.

Akshara Kolipaka

9/9/2021 05:41:16 pm

Although most European settlements were established with the purpose of Gold, Glory and God, they all developed different methods of colonization in North America during 1607 to1754 based upon various factors such as individual goals, interactions with indigenous civilizations , systems of labour, economic stability and religious nature.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:28:19 pm

Get rid of the "based upon ...goals" portion as it's off topic. Replace it with "such as" or "including" Also, the counterpoint needs to be a specific way they colonized, not a purpose for colonization. Limit yourself to the three strongest main points.

Akshara Kolipaka

9/11/2021 05:19:48 pm

Although most European settlements were established with a centralized system of government, Colonies established by France, England and Spain had developed different methods of colonization during 1607 to 1754 with various systems of racial labour, contrasting interactions with indigenous civilizations and a distinctive set of religious beliefs .

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:04:34 pm

Drop "had" before the word developed - passive voice. Also, the third main point on religious beliefs needs to be rephrased to a way they used religion to colonize.

Ian Williams

9/8/2021 12:28:48 pm

European colonies in the Americas were all formed with similar goals, the acquisition of raw materials, the spreading of religion, and the spread of their influence to foreign peoples in lands not called their own. These three factors stayed at the forefront of European colonization, but the method of colonization formed itself in different ways as religion, ethnicity, and individual goals changed. The main ways they differentiated themselves from themselves was by colonies being either a planter colony, a settler colony, or an extractive colony.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:30:03 pm

The thesis needs to be one sentence long. Drop references to goals, the question asks the WAYS they colonized, not the why's. The question wants you to say whether they were more similar or more different in the ways they colonized, to take another swing at it.

Ian Williams

9/10/2021 11:28:28 am

REVISED - While colonies were formed mostly with three separate foundations, which are planter colonies, extracting colonies, and settler colonies, the overall building blocks of American colonies were quite similar.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:05:10 pm

You need to list at least two specific similarities as your main points.

Riley James

9/8/2021 09:07:20 pm

European powers developed vastly different methods of colonization in the Americas, such as french fur trading or spanish plundering of developed civilizations. They did all have similar end goals, to enrich themselves and to increase their global power and their reach while boosting their economies.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 09:31:23 pm

Needs to be a single sentence. Question wants you to say whether they were more similar or more different in the ways they colonized, so make those your main points and counterpoint.

Riley James

9/9/2021 09:33:09 pm

Though European powers all colonized North America at the expense of natives, They developed dissimilar methods of colonization in the Americas, for example the French focus on fur trading with less permanent settlement compared to the English settler colonialism which had an emphasis on cash crops and a large forced labor component.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 09:06:14 pm

You need to rephrase the end to be a list of ways you will compare the two nations, not a list for the French then a separate list for the English.

Siifan Hirpa

9/10/2021 09:12:07 am

the british and the french colonial economic colonial systems were quite different with the british going hard into slave labor and profiting of off it in the south, and the french primarily had people come from the home country for the fur trade, it could be made that they were similar in the sense that they were quite lucrative, but in the end the french left due to (quebec being a cold hellhole that nobody should live in) the land not being able to sustain the colonists.

Hutch$

9/10/2021 11:41:58 am

You are explaining the main point here and you should save those explanations for later. In the thesis just list them. You are also just examining one point of difference here (economic systems). What you should do is decide whether you think they were more similar or more different in the ways they colonized. Write you thesis then to identify 2-3 points of comparison you think are most important then a single point of comparison you think is less important as a counterpoint.

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