Thesis Statement Board, Hutchison, 1st Period

9/3/2021

Post your thesis statement rough draft here before 12:00am tonight. I will post my comments by Wednesday so that you can make the appropriate adjustments.

You are NOT required to read and comment on other's thesis statements at this point.

PROMPT: To what extent and in what ways did European powers develop different patterns of colonization in North America during the period from 1607 to 1754?

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91 Comments

JiaJia Ye

9/3/2021 11:16:19 am

While North American colonies developed unique cultures and governments, most eventually came to share similar patterns of racial slavery, mercantilist economies, and conflict with Native Americans which had longer-lasting and more significant effects on society.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:22:58 pm

The counterpoint needs to be only one specific category of difference. You also need to rephrase so that your response is focusing on the actions of European colonizing nations, not just how the colonies themselves developed. Drop the final phrase about long-lasting and significant effects on society, those are details your body paragraphs will explore, here just say "more historically significant" to streamline the sentence.

JiaJia Ye

9/9/2021 11:42:33 pm

While Europeans first arriving in the Americas established settlements with very different ideals, most eventually adopted similar patterns of racial slavery, mercantilist economies, and conflict with Native Americans, which were more historically significant.

JiaJia Ye

9/9/2021 11:50:32 pm

I saw that “different goals” doesn’t count as a counterpoint

While Europeans established colonies with vastly different cultures, most eventually adopted similar patterns of racial slavery, mercantilist economies, and conflict with Native Americans, which were more historically significant.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:44:13 pm

You are ALMOST there. The counterpoint still needs revision because it needs to be a way they colonized. "Different cultures" is an outcome of colonization. Think along the same lines as your main points, which are things they did to colonize (set up economic systems, established enslaved labor systems, etc.)

Anish Devineni

9/3/2021 01:09:50 pm

Although many North American colonies depended on different economic practices, many came together to practice slavery, spread their religion and gain wealth which impacted how they developed their government.

Anish Devineni

9/8/2021 08:21:22 am

Although many North American colonies depended on different economic practices, many colonies came together to practice slavery, take Indians' land or use Indians, and export raw materials which impacted how the colonies developed their government.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:24:30 pm

Rephrase to focus on the actions of the European colonizing nations, not the development of the colonies themselves. Drop the end phrase about how the similarities affected government development, the question doesn't ask about effects.

Anish Devineni

9/10/2021 07:34:46 am

Although many North American colonies had different cultures and impacts on North America, many colonies came together to practice some form of slavery, take Indians' land or use Indians, and export raw materials which impacted how the colonies developed through the time period.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:45:50 pm

You are ALMOST there. The counterpoint still needs revision because it needs to be a way they colonized. "Different cultures" is an outcome of colonization. You also need to drop everything after "export raw materials." as none of that contributes to your argument in response to the question.

Anish Devineni

9/14/2021 07:58:42 am

Although many North American colonies had different uses of the land and impacts on North America, many colonies came together to practice some form of slavery, take Indians' land or use Indians, and export raw materials.

Hutch$

9/14/2021 08:51:35 am

You got it :)

Sriharsha Jaladhi

9/3/2021 06:38:29 pm

While European colonies all practiced different ways of colonization and focus on different things, many of the colonies colonized in patterns and ways that would either help them strategically, economically, politically, or religiously.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:25:55 pm

Counterpoint needs to be one specific difference in the way European nations colonized. Your main points also need to be ways they colonized, not why they chose those ways (strategic gains)

Luke Young

9/3/2021 08:53:59 pm

Although Early Europeans had a plethora of migration and colonization models,most were influenced by cultures , differing goals, vastly different North American environments, and their conflicts with American Indians for resources.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:26:58 pm

Question doesn't ask about why they colonized or what shaped their colonization, it asks HOW they colonized, so change up your points/counterpoint to be specific ways they colonized.

Luke Young

9/12/2021 08:22:35 am

Although Early Europeans in North America from 1607 to 1754 implemented many similar structures like slavery ,most colonized with their different approach to native american relationships , political ,and economic system.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:46:20 pm

Good! .

Joselyn Yoo

9/3/2021 09:05:20 pm

Though the basic prospect of commercial control influenced European colonization, the empires were more heavily driven by their individual imperial, religious, and economic agendas.

Joselyn Yoo

9/8/2021 08:45:37 am

Though European empires similarly instituted slavery as a means to colonize in North America from 1607 to 1754, their individual labor systems, economic systems, and relations with indigenous peoples held more historical significance.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:27:46 pm

Rephrase to add an expression of significance and clearly state your assertion is "differences."

Joselyn Yoo

9/10/2021 07:31:11 am

Though European empires similarly instituted slavery as a means to colonize in North America, their differences in labor systems, economic systems, and relations with indigenous peoples held more significance.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:46:52 pm

Good job.

Yiming Sun

9/3/2021 09:45:41 pm

After Columbus's unprecedented discovery, immigrants from different countries with diverse religions and pursuits landed on various regions of this continent, creating distinctive colonies, influencing every aspect including the relationships with natives, economical infrastructure, and the modality of slavery.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:30:18 pm

You are providing historical context that belongs elsewhere in the essay. Rephrase to state a direct claim and counterclaim focusing on the ways they colonized (your main points are good, just change the phrasing so that they are in support of an argument about similarity or difference.

Makayla Johnson

9/3/2021 10:23:49 pm

Although settlement in the Americas started for Gold, God, and Glory, the emphasis on one of these aspects was more prevelent at different periods of colonization, as evidenced by the fact that the early settlement of jamestown was settled for gold and Glory and massachusetts bay, one of the later colonies, for God.

Makayla Johnson

9/8/2021 10:02:17 am

Although some would argue that the English and French were mainly similar in their ways of colonization because they both took land from the natives to make money, and practiced Christianity, a more detailed analysis of the ways in which colonization happened would find that England and France were mostly dissimilar in their colonization of the Americas due to differences in their reason for being in the colonies, their settlements, labor systems, indian relations, and governments.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:31:28 pm

Pick ONE of the specific examples for your counterpoint.You may want to simplify the phrasing to streamline the sentence, but otherwise, good!

Makayla Johnson

9/10/2021 07:29:02 am

Although some would argue that the English and French were mainly similar in their ways of colonization because they both took land from the natives for profit, a more detailed analysis of the ways in which colonization happened would find that England and France were mostly dissimilar in their colonization of the Americas due to differences in their motives for colonizing, their settlements, labor systems, indian relations, and governments.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:48:30 pm

Drop the main point about motives then choose which three of the remaining four you will keep as four main points are too many for the amount of writing time you will have. (I recommend dropping the "settlements" one as it's pretty broad.)

Maleia Johnson

9/3/2021 10:46:21 pm

While there were slightly different methods of colonization used at first when colonizing North America, they all shared similar aspects such as their religious motives, goals of economical gain, and conflicts with natives, therefore making these methods much more similar than they were different.

Maleia Johnson

9/8/2021 06:14:14 pm

Although different European powers colonized for differing durations of time, the patterns seen in European colonization methods were mainly similar in the way that they instituted slavery and servitude, and the types of relations they formed with natives.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:32:09 pm

Counterpoint needs to be a way the colonized, not the time frame of colonization. The rest is good!

Maleia Johnson

9/12/2021 12:42:33 pm

Although different European powers set up different political systems, the patterns seen in European colonization methods were mainly similar in the way that they instituted slavery and servitude, types of relations they formed with natives, and their mercantilist economies.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:49:04 pm

Your last revision is good! :)

Paavan Thaker

9/4/2021 01:03:57 am

Although European powers had many ways to develop and choose colonization patterns, the deciding factor on which to use was dependent on the purpose of the colony itself, such as religion, trade/commerce, farming, slave labor and importing/exporting goods.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:33:41 pm

Counterpoint needs to be a specific way they colonized, not the process of choosing those ways. Drop the whole thing about dependent on the purpose of the colonies; the question asks how they colonized, not why they colonized those ways.

Farhad Bhatti

9/4/2021 01:39:22 am

Although Europeans had similar methods of colonization based on a plethora of factors in the beginning, they began to diverge and the most prominent and deciding patterns were the difference of relations with Native Americans based on geolocation, imperialistic goals, and religious patterns.

Farhad

9/9/2021 07:47:07 pm

Although Europeans like the french and english had similar economic goals in the colonization of america, they began to diverge and the most prominent and deciding patterns were the difference of relations with Native Americans based on geolocation, imperialistic goals, labor systems and economic practices.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:35:31 pm

Capitalizations ;)
Goals are not a "way" they colonized, so choose a different counterpoint. Simplify your phrasing on the degree of significance portion: "more importantly..." is sufficient and flows better for the reader than "began to diverge..." etc.

Sophia Melin

9/4/2021 12:51:30 pm

Despite the vast abundance of migrant and colonization patterns of European powers in North America, most of the everlasting effects were significantly influenced by economic, religious, or imperial agendas.

Sophia Melin

9/8/2021 08:26:29 am

Despite the similarity in economic systems in European powers in North America at the time of colonization, more significance lies in the differences in formation of the labor systems, relationships with the natives, and support from the home country.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:35:54 pm

Good!

Saahil Patel link

9/4/2021 06:11:41 pm

Different European powers had different patterns of colonization, migration, trading, and even interaction with natives and while they did do similar things like slavery, wealth, spreading religion they always had there own patterns for what there goals were for the colonization like wealth or trading outpost or settlers living there.

Saahil Patel link

9/8/2021 10:14:23 pm

Many European nations colonized some part of America, for people may say that that the ways and patterns of England and France were similar for they both had slavery for work, took and pushed natives out of there land and practiced religions while the differences in there patterns were there governments, goals, reasons, and trading and exporting and importing even just different colonizations styles.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:39:44 pm

You need to seriously simplify the phrasing of this sentence. Choose ONE of your specific counterpoint examples and drop the others. Drop anything about goals or reasons; the question asks how they colonized, not why. The last point "colonization styles" is far too broad so just drop that too.

Saahil Patel link

9/14/2021 03:45:34 pm

Both of these countries had similar ways of colonizing like using slaves for their work source but they had different patterns like relationships and interactions with the natives.

Hutch$

9/15/2021 08:47:51 am

Good

Saxon York

9/4/2021 11:52:30 pm

Even though some North American colonies were developed with peaceful interactions with the natives, the greater utilized model an oppressive one, with widespread slavery and brutal treatment of the natives, as well as large religious influences, all of which helped to develop more profitable colonies.

Saxon York

9/8/2021 10:19:38 pm

Although it's true some North American colonies were developed with peaceful interactions with the natives, the greater utilized model was one with widespread brutality towards the natives, mercantilist economies focusing on exporting goods, and systems of race based slavery, all of which helped to develop more profitable colonies.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:41:12 pm

You need to rephrase so that the thesis is arguing similarities versus differences. This means your counterpoint will need to change as well since your main points are all similarities. Drop the last part about the effects these had, the questions doesn't ask about that.

Saxon York

9/12/2021 09:29:40 pm

Although it's true most North American colonies had similar mercantilist economies focused on exports, the differences in government support, native relations, and religious groups separated each pattern of colonization distinctly.

Hutch$

9/14/2021 08:52:19 am

Revision on the 12th is good to go.

Venice S Andales

9/6/2021 11:57:43 am

During the start of colonization of the New World, European colonists had similar ways of embarking on the newfoundlands of the Americas. However, they began to develop greater differences in their approach to colonization in terms of the differences in their relationships with the Native communities, diverging commerce in the New World, and religious warfare that occurred due to their differences in beliefs.

Venice S Andales

9/8/2021 08:15:24 pm

Despite the similarities in these European nations economic systems at the time of colonization in North America. They portrayed more distinct differences including, relations with the natives, the trading practices, and religious views.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:41:40 pm

Make it one sentence, otherwise, good!

Venice S Andales

9/10/2021 07:32:54 am

Despite the similarities in these European nations economic systems at the time of colonization in North America, they portrayed more distinct differences including, relations with the natives, the trading practices, and religious views.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:50:02 pm

Change up your last main point to express a way they used religion to colonize and you have it!

Engelina Xiong

9/6/2021 02:03:32 pm

Although European colonization in North America, in their interactions with natives and use of slave labor, was similar throughout most colonies, different European powers developed different patterns of colonization because of their differing motives, such as for economic profit, proselytization, or immigrant refuge from religious persecution.

Engelina Xiong

9/8/2021 07:47:40 pm

Although European colonization in North America — in their interactions with natives and use of slave labor — was similar throughout most colonies, different European powers developed different patterns of colonization in the colonies through differing government, economic, and social structures.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:42:27 pm

Add a "more importantly" or something similar to turn this into an argument. Otherwise, good!

Engelina Xiong

9/9/2021 11:08:15 pm

Although European colonization in North America — in their use of slave labor — was similar throughout most colonies, greater historical significance lies in how different European powers developed different patterns of colonization in the colonies through differing government, economic, and social structures.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:50:41 pm

Your latest revision is good!

Guhan Jayakrishnan

9/6/2021 10:51:26 pm

Although the common interest of the colonies were similar in that they all had profit mindset, to always get something out of their situation , and all the colonies had their individual ways and motives for doing so may it be religion, crop farming, or exportation of raw material.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:43:35 pm

The last two main points are good, but all the rest about motives and reasons are off topic as the question wants to know about how, not why, they colonized.

Grace Boughton

9/7/2021 01:34:40 pm

Throughout the period from 1607-1754, European powers went from similar patterns of colonization in North America to varying patterns of colonization due to their motivations for colonization, and the interactions that were had between each country and the land and Native people there.

Grace Boughton

9/8/2021 08:29:59 am

Although it's true that England and France were similar in some aspects of their patterns of colonization, such as the power that their respective religions held in their colonies, throughout the period from 1607-1754, their patterns of colonization in terms of the government systems established there, their populations, and the interactions that were had with Indigenous people differed greatly.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:44:34 pm

Good, but you might be able to simplify the phrasing, like eliminating the time period information since you will discuss that in the intro paragraph.

Grace Boughton

9/10/2021 07:29:14 am

Although it's true that England and France were similar in some aspects of their patterns of colonization, such as the power that their respective religions held in their colonies, their patterns of colonization in terms of the government systems established there, their populations, and the interactions that were had with Indigenous people differed greatly.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:51:06 pm

Good to go!

Liam Young

9/7/2021 05:04:45 pm

While one could argue in the beginning of the colonization of North America the Overall the patterns of colonization were very similar. Later on we see how this original pattern branched into a whole bunch of other ways European countries colonized. Plus how these ways impacted the land they did so in. We also got to see how these practices impacted their relationships between other colonists, and the land's native people.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:46:20 pm

This needs to be a single sentence so change out the periods for commas. Drop the information about change over time and just identify a specific similarity for your counterpoint and specific differences in the ways they colonized for main points. Drop anything about impacts and outcomes.

Daniel Herrera

9/7/2021 05:21:33 pm

While earlier Dutch and French colonies in North America were intended either to act as trade ports or settlements with friendly relations towards natives, the outlasting British colonies by and large became either harsh religious societies escaping persecution abroad, or plantation economy settlements intended for wealth and the expansion of global trade.

Daniel Herrera

9/8/2021 07:28:11 pm

While earlier Dutch and French colonies in North America acted as trade ports or settlements with friendly relations towards natives, the outlasting British colonies were substantially different from their earlier competitors in economics, governance, and growth patterns.

Daniel Herrera

9/9/2021 07:19:26 pm

While most initial settlements in North America carried out by the French, Dutch, and British were similar, the outlasting British colonies would evolve to be substantially different from their earlier competitors in economics, governance, and growth patterns.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:48:29 pm

I can't post a reply to your revision below, so I'm posting it here. Drop anything about the change occurring over time (outlasting colonies, would evolve...) and make sure you are phrasing it so that you will be talking differences among all the colonies in your main argument.

Daniel Herrera

9/12/2021 04:10:14 pm

While most initial settlements in North America carried out by the French, Dutch, and British were similar in functions like slavery, they were carried out in substantially different ways in economics, governance, and growth patterns.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:51:31 pm

Good! .

Alex Clawson

9/7/2021 06:22:10 pm

Although many European powers had similar ways of colonization, it was slowly changed due to different goals of colonization and changes in relationship between the many groups of people which led to change in development of religion, racial acceptance, and commerce.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:50:10 pm

Drop anything about change over time. Identify a specific similarity for the counterpoint.. Also, drop any references to goals and causes/effects: This is a comparison question - were they more similar or more different in the ways they colonized?

Kavya Kolindala

9/7/2021 10:40:42 pm

Colonies in North America retained differences in government and people, but colonization patterns tended to drift toward being similar due to European motives for profit, religion, and land.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:51:18 pm

Your main argument is about the effect of motives, but the question didn't ask about that. The question wants you to say whether they were more similar or more different in the ways they colonized.

Kavya Kolindala

9/12/2021 04:06:41 pm

Even though the way economic systems were structured throughout colonies in North America were similar, the relationship between natives and colonists, political systems, and independence from Europe differed from colony to colony.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:51:52 pm

Last revision is good!

Robert Whitehead

9/8/2021 07:14:47 am

While most North American colonies had their own diverse cultures, governments, and societies, many took the same step in regards to racism and its effects on slavery, conflicts with Native Americans, and the universal spread of religion.

Robert Whitehead

9/9/2021 05:53:55 pm

While most North American colonies had their own diverse cultures and societies, many of the controlling European powers applied similar things such as racism and its effects on slavery, everlasting conflicts with Native Americans, and the universal spread of religion.

Hutch$

9/9/2021 08:53:33 pm

Needs rephrasing so that both sides of the argument are about actions taken by the European colonizers, not one side 9your current counterpoint) about the colonies themselves. Simplify your first main point to enslaved labor systems. Also, think about your last point... how is that a way they colonized?

Robert Whitehad

9/27/2021 04:09:35 pm

While the ins and outs of many North American cultures and societies were different, the ideals of racism, as well as conflicts with Native Americans and the universal spread of religion all remained a constant among the colonies.

Robert Whitehead

9/27/2021 05:03:05 pm

While European colonizers brought unique cultures and societies to different areas, traditional ideas stayed in the norm such as enforced labor systems, conflicts with Native Americans, and the universal spread of Christianity and its effects on colonization.

Anya Sheikh

9/10/2021 07:34:35 am

While European Powers had great similarities in their economic motivations to colonize North America, development of labor systems, religious aspirations, and relations with Native Americans led them to different patterns of colonization.

Hutch$

9/12/2021 08:53:01 pm

Good, but maybe ad the word "their" before "...development of labor systems..." to help the flow of the sentence when reading.

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